Sunday, 23 February 2014

WALT: Begin our writing with a super starter

Today we practiced beginning our story with a time and then give the reader clues about where we might be and what we are doing.


It was 10:40 AM. Oops I dropped my present but, I am soooooo excited.’’ OK I will put these socks on and then we can jump????? ‘’I asked happily. No, first the instructor will tell us the safety rules and THEN we can jump.’’ Rosie said calmly. So the instructor told us the safety rules and then we walked through the corridor and every one with green bands stormed up the stairs and started jumping. ‘’WEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ‘’ I yelled as I slipped off the rope into the foam pit. ‘’That was fun!!!
By Hannah

Declan thought the "weeeeeeeee" part was really funny
Sora noticed that she used lots of punctuation.
Miss Hopkins thought she gave the reader really great clues about what she was doing.

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